Kia ora Kieron, my name is Chloe King I liked the way that you presented it. Next time you could make it a little bit bigger? Maybe you could also make the spelling right next time as well? I hope that you had fun making your blog post? From Chloe King Yaldhurst Model School
Hi Kieron! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. I like how your post was really eye catching with all the bright colors. I also like the way you used lot's of imagery (five senses) in your writing. Did you know that you can use similes and metaphors or even personification (if you've learnt it) in your recounts? Because our class has been working on doing that.
Is this all the text? or is there more because I feel like it's been cut of at the top and the end. To fix that you could try making it on a slide then publishing the whole slide onto your blog.
Kia Ora Kieron It's Chloe King here, I like this blog post because of all the colours that are in the photo. Maybe next time you could make it a slide and add some pictures of you? Maybe also next time you could add more punctuation? This blog post was fabulous I really liked the way you did it but if you add that stuff in it will look SPECTACULAR!!! Did you have some fun with making this blog? Chloe King Yaldhurst Model School
Kia ora Kieron, my name is Chloe King
ReplyDeleteI liked the way that you presented it.
Next time you could make it a little bit bigger?
Maybe you could also make the spelling right next time as well?
I hope that you had fun making your blog post?
From Chloe King
Yaldhurst Model School
Hi Kieron! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. I like how your post was really eye catching with all the bright colors. I also like the way you used lot's of imagery (five senses) in your writing. Did you know that you can use similes and metaphors or even personification (if you've learnt it) in your recounts? Because our class has been working on doing that.
ReplyDeleteIs this all the text? or is there more because I feel like it's been cut of at the top and the end. To fix that you could try making it on a slide then publishing the whole slide onto your blog.
Great job!
Mia
Ok thank you for that feed back I will be sure to to that.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Kieron It's Chloe King here,
ReplyDeleteI like this blog post because of all the colours that are in the photo.
Maybe next time you could make it a slide and add some pictures of you?
Maybe also next time you could add more punctuation?
This blog post was fabulous I really liked the way you did it but if you add that stuff in it will look SPECTACULAR!!!
Did you have some fun with making this blog?
Chloe King
Yaldhurst Model School